Saturday, September 25, 2010

My First Treatment of the Year!

This treatment relates to the movie Amelie. This treatment is about a girl's problem, which will help her find love at the same time.

Treatment: Girl’s Dilema

A classroom filled with students, some voices are heard in the background as a teacher’s voice appears in the foreground. A girl, sitting in the back desk, near a window.

The girl looks out the window, then hears a vibration. The vibration is text message alert.
The girl smiles and looks at the text message.

The girl starts to text in class, while the teacher is speaking. The girl’s eyes go up and down so she doesn’t get in trouble for texting in class. The bell rings.

The girl walks out of the class, with her phone, she is texting, and she bumps into a boy.

She turns red and starts to run out of the classroom. The boy just keeps on looking at her until she is out of his view.

Near the end of the school day, the girl puts her phone on the desk and forgets about it. The boy she bumps into, sees the phone and grabs it.

The girl is outside the school, there are many background voices, and she is talking with her friends.

She checks her pocket for her phone and she doesn’t find it. She then checks her bag and still couldn’t find it.

The girl walks back to her last class and checks her desk, but she finds nothing. The girl begins to panic and thinks about where she puts it.

She begins to dream about her phone. She is imagining herself texting all day in class and at home. She is the only person you see in her dream.

She left her classroom and looked out in the hallway. She sees the boy that she bumped into.

The boy walks toward her and begins to start a conversation, the girl gets shy, but she begins to feel that she has a crush on that boy.

Then the boy begins to open his backpack, and the the girl begins to wonder why he is doing that.

The boy pulls out her phone and she starts to scream and jump up and down.

She thanks the boy and tells him that her phone is very important to her.

The boy responds by smiling, then gives her a hug, and they both walk off holding hands.

Music is playing in the background as the two characters get out of the shot.

3 comments:

  1. The music at the end is a little corny and unrealistic, as well as the holding hands part(believe me I've tried it=/), but the scenes are very vivid. Maybe you could spice up the plot a little to make it a little longer. A good start =)

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  2. The plot seems to stick to the stereotypical romance encounters of people our age these days. I think you could come up with some more (random, maybe?) conflicts that have to deal with the girl trying to get the guy.

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  3. I think the story could be better; its a rough start but has potential. It has a quick and short ending, maybe add to that. The characters are simple and modern that could be good, but also bad because some people may find that stereotypical. It needs more details, different locations, more action. It is vague. Maybe add more emotion into each character and their actions. Good start though.

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